Over at Tweetspeakpoetry.com the discussion surrounds a technique called cataloging. Here’s my attempt with a little inspiration from Arthur Miller’s Death of a Salesman. Enjoy and share your thoughts if you have time.
Willy Loman
by Joel E. Jacobson
I went on a date with America
and she slipped a pill into my beer.
As I faded like a bad TV show,
she told me that success was in the pudding,
that I would be a man if I had millions,
and millions would admire me
for being the embodiment of her dream.
My boys would respect me
and my wife would be interesting
and I would see me and know me and be me,
standing above the rabblement.
I awoke to find her picking up
shredded economic forecasts,
stock reports, and quarterly earnings,
weaving them into a noose.
I like this exploration. It’s a subtle use of cataloging (“that/that” “millions/millions” “My/my” “me/me/me”)
Really nice.
Thanks so much!
This is terrific, Joel! An exercise that transforms itself into real poetry—or that somehow releases it back into the wild….
Thanks, Joe!